Today I read Gregory's essay. As I was reading it I notice that he wrote about the man in the greek plays. I notice that he had a different point of the man in Medea and Antigone. He spoke about how the actions about the man was best. WHen I read the play I dislike Jason and Creon because of what they did two two woman. But after reading Gregory's essay my view kinda change. I understand where Gregory is coming from. I enjoyed reading this beause I was able to see someones different side of the man and actually learn something. I learned that both man actually did those suppose because they wanted everything for the best. Not to make those women’s lives hell either. I enjoyed reading this essay because he had quotes that supported his thesis. His topic sentences supported his thesis. Once I read his intro I got hook into it. HE gave good ideas and examples. THe only thing I will have to say is that he is missing a 3rd body paragraph. He only had two body paragraphs. His conclusion is too short, he should put more writing into this essay. His quotes were really good. As well. I felt that will one more proof read and him finding his mistakes he could be fine and write another paragraph because it was not a complete essay.
As for my essay I have to say I loved my intro. I felt that I did a good job making a good hook and backing it up with a good thesis. However, I felt that i could of done a better job with the quotes. I did use quotes but I only used about 3. The quotes that I used backed up my thesis but I felt that it could of been better. I wish I went to the writing before handing in the essay before hand, but once i get my grade and review my corrections I will do a better job. For my next essay I will go to the writing center to get comments on how I can improve in my writing and get a good grade.I really want to get a A in this class. I love english so much and I love writing. I just have to put more effort into getting that A in my essay.
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